you picked the right catagory and it was definately a nice poem. The thing is...i find a lot of people on here lack structure...not saying i am going to count beats on each line, because that is just stupid...i don't do that because i am not going to do that.

A) i am not professional
B) i am not going to spend that much time.
C) it is a waste of time EAP didn't nor did anyone else, socrates, dican, neitchize<spelling>.
D) i think it really ruins the poem.

I think you just need to adjust your bars in your stanza's to come close to it, sorry for the speel. if you want to know what a bar and stanza is look below.

Five/Five

P.S. thank you for your comment/and or vote on my poem, each one that i get really inspires me to write more.

Bar) it consists of two lines that are equal in lenght or somewhere close to one and other.

Stanza) usually consists of one bar or two bar's strung togeather to make what is known as a stanza.