Amanda,

the first paragraph is excellent I love how you simply state

"I'm scared,
I don't want to lose you.
But it feels like,
You're slipping away,
Out of my life."

And expressing your fear of losing one you love always touches the reader to some degree. I guess it is because we can all relate.

Overall this piece is really good. And unlike me you have stayed away from the traditional rhyming and that makes it even better.

Best Wishes Babe

--Sher