okk i'll be honest with u ..i didn't like the way uve potrayed the subject,which itself is getting pretty old as far as dark poems go,,,i think a little more of description would have helped the piece a lot...
that being said,i completely agree with you that anyone can improve.i like ur rhyming scheme and the emotion uve tried to potray
keep writing

As I start to sink to the ground
I'm now watching from above
As my body is quickly liquefied
A creature of evil, I am now one of

i thought tht was lovely

wow! amazing and chilling, i love it!

Disturbing. And hopefully, if this is based on actual dreams, may your dreams take a different and more light turn.

This is another good poem and you are a really talented writer. 5/5. Love Emma xxx

check out my poems some times. means alot to me thanks
luv
nida
wonderful

Wow, really good.. Keep up the good work.

wow ive not read any dark & fantasy poems before but really enjoyed this one!!!would luv to hear ur views on my poems! excellent work xxxLoUxxx

Bravo! An awsome poem, I really liked the whole poem, don't know how to word it, but great job!

good job

~ very nice poem, excellent!
~ take care, 5! always believe in love ~amit

Very nice, thanks for the comments on mine. Keep em comin.

Very well written. My honest opinion. I liked the ending and it's just such a stunning poem. Keep up the amazing work.
Luv KT

Very powerful...and very dark. stay strong
xxxxxx

Amazing its been a while since I have been here. Your poems are still so detailed and touch me to my core as always. Have a lovely day:)

Hi again! sorry i wasn't here to write u, but, i just moved and it's been a helluva journey!! w/b sumtime k? i like this poem btw keep writing, it kinda reminded me of myself especially about the whole "they want me to conform..." thing, i can relate. well g2g so w/b willya cya l8r!!! if u don't remember me im Moxie, i just changed the name