by EoB Mar 14, 2005
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
I have been walking for many a year |
by Marjan
wow, this one is really great. I like |
I loved this one too....your very talented, i love the way you use the words(If that makes sense,lol) It flows well and the message is beautiful,and true....I love how you use questions, it really interests the reader(me!lol) and makes them want to read more and also i love how it starts "positively" but there's like an HoWeVeR!!! Very unique 5* |
by Emilia
Very good poem!!! 5/5! wow! |
by NoPatience
pretty good. really good actually. keep up the great work and always smile |
by Robert
On a whole I like your work its descriptive and has good flow. On the down side. I think you get your message lost too easily in the words you use. Making your work too not and just weighed down with so much that it seems like the reader has to force themselves to read the rest. Too much lull time between action I think Ann Rice does alot of this. Well that is my opinion take it or leave it I hoped I helped... |