Wow, I liked this one even better than your other poem. For this one I don't have any critique, I thought it was totally awesome! The flow was great and I loved your use of words. 5/5 for this one too!
SatuzKa

Beautifully written..
The emotions are there,
undisturb..
keep it up..
okies..cookies.
;)

Very well written with a nice flow. Showed emotion wouldn't change a thing on this poem! Take Care! 5/5 Brooke

Would u check out the one I posted today Set Free I would really appreciate it! Thanx!

Well, Killer, sounds like what you're saying I should revise is going to make it PREDICTABLE...

Just for a note to everybody, if you even care, this poem is meant to flow off the tounge, to be easily read but with a much deeper meaning than I'm guessing a lot of people get.

Strong xx

I totally get the meaning, and poetry doesn't have to match perfectly by stanza. That's why it's poetry, and this is definitely an excellent poem more people should read! You definitely have my 5/5 vote!
Luv always, KT

That was good. Just amazing. I love your poems. Keep writing!

-Ice

Beautiful, amazing, and truly wonderful.

I really really enjoyed the beginning of this poem, very descriptive, flowed nicely, the ending, where i thought it was still very good didn't have the same impact to me as the beginning.
I think you are extremely talented and very expressive however. I gave you a 5/5

Very emotional. Well done

hey your poem was good.. i gave you 5/5.. lol of my poems you picked one of the ones i hate the most!! lol everyone has a few they hate.. i guess only b/c i have grown i think as a writter and that was one of my first ones.. just thought you should know that maybe you will like some of my other poems if you read them.. i'll check out some of yours too.. bye bye EJ

amazing.. this is reli gr8.. and the message is loud and clear.. i absolutely love ur ending.. cant w8 2 read "Grief Unheard"
keep up the talent

I really like this poem! 5/5...It was an excellent read!

hey another great poem good job im loving this one to.

interesting....

wow great poem..i kinda had trouble following it at first but i got it...really good...keep it up..luv yasmwah

-kayla-

Exellent poem:) I like your writing style alot, problem is now I have to read them all out of curiosity;p

Best wishes,
Patrik

This was very good very strong..i loved ur rhythem and the flow was excellent. I loved how it just rolled off my tongue, and didnt' skip a beat. it was great.

oh..btw just as a little hint, i see ur (c) for copywrite, and i just wanted to give u the code to make a real one :) its alt+0169=©

loved the use of words!?!
it flowed great!?!
and i just loved it!?!

well done man it rocked!

x)