1st, thnx 4 commenting on my poems. Second, I liked the story of your poem but I didn't think the poem itself flowed well enough. To make it a good poem it has to be easy for the reader to read and yours was a bit confusing! Liked it though. bye

hey, me again, ummmm, I took wat u said about my poem "You are....." into perspective nad I changed it up a little bit. I'd really appreciate if you would check it out and see my changes!