Excellently presented. Haven't gotten there yet, though I foresee it may be coming sooner than I may like. Thus far being able to stave off that philosophical view from within, though. ;)

I am only 25.

And no, i don't rhyme for the sake of it.

The beginning left me very confused and bewilderd, but you done a nice job bringing the poem together for the reader with your ending.

Though I was not intrigued at first and felt some what uninterested, I am glad that I read it through all the way.

Good job... Excellent closing

--Sher

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Kevin I thought this was a really wonderful piece, totally great ending, sometimes you read poems on the site and they are great the whole way through until you come to the end and its not the ending you thought it would be....but this was just perfect....keep writing.

Wow, I really thought this was a great peice, you made me miss my old birthdays, lol.

I enjoyed this poem. You are very creative with your words and the metaphoric content linking one side of the story with the other. One thing that I think would help is adding punctuation because it helps the flow and meaning of what you are trying to convey. Representing the realisation of the journey and such, I didn't particularly like, it feels as if (in my opinion) that it lacks something. You're rhyming scheme was good that you did not always use it or force it; however it did strike me as odd when it for no reason, started rhyming.

Hey i really liked this it had meaning.
~Kyra~

That was the truth about life. . it was realy nice work.
you are a talented writer.
i am giving you 5/5