Very deep stuff, and i'm glad the topic of this poem is original. very good, i really enjoyed it. you ended the poem with very good words, it suits it so well. Keep writing, take care.
Satuxxa

great message and this poem worked so well, it flowed amazingly well and was just awesome!!!

This is really good and it got me to think about my life, what a great idea and message to send out!!! Great flow and yeah just amazing!!!

Nice poem....I like the message it portrays. You've done a good job w/ sentence fluency though some of the poem doesn't flow exactly the same. I'm usually not a rhyming-poem fan, but, you've done a good job.