i'm not for sure what your usual writing style is but this poem is written well. great work!

Bob, you just made my day. That means so much to me.

Thought provoking stuff there K.

Bob says all you need to know.

The segmentation works well; underscores admirably the confliction present in your words. Likewise, I enjoy the images scattered about. Truthfully, the complete effect reminds me of a mirror shattered in darkness broken only perhaps by a shaft of moonlight through an open window; enough light to gently set to glow each shard. Beautiful poem.

Beautiful discription, I respect your opinion highly, so this, likewise to Mr. Shanks and Brets opinions, means a lot to me.

Wow. Beautiful poem. I'm lost at words here, good job. :)

WOW... I REALLY LIKED THIS POEM, WELL I LIKE ALL OF YOUR WORK . YOU ARE REALLY TALENTED!!! 5/5.....

COULD YOU VOTE OR COMMENT ON SOME OF MY POEMS IT WOULD REALLY MEAN A LOT TO ME...
MUCH LOVE
~*~HEATHER~*~

the rhythym is constant. good job

Once again powerful and poignant. As it is you're an incredible poetess in a variety of styles--I can't imagine how amazing you'll be as your lifetime progresses!

Stunning, remarkible, suburb even, Disturbing to read, but amazingly so. I loved it. Poe would have been proud. you are an amazing poet. i have yet to read your other poems, but after this, i think ill cheak them out

i really liket his poem .....don't change it its good how it is

I mean amazing words girlfriend

Ya'll are so sweet to me *blush*

Thank you :)

the form of this poem is absolutely brilliant. It's different, but it works! Very, very good job. 5/5.

yes i agreee it is different but i love it!
its a different style but of fabulous writting well done! luv sam xox

Thank you for being honest, JPM. I can always count on you for that.

Very good, the ryhmes were a little hard to pick up, but i liked that because the ryhmings subtle and does not restrict the poetry. Exceeeelante!

To make this poem better I would say to not try to make it sound so good but put some of your feelings into it. When I read this I feel nothing

I see what you mean, Carrie, but it was meant to be that way, it's about repressed emotion to a certain extent, so it's not supposed to make people feel as much as they think.

Thank you :)

stunning

ellie
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