this is atruely rtouching poem, very very emotional, 5/5 good writing, keep uip the awesome work k
xoxo
*~#LuCy#~*

Hey, first of all thank you for commenting on my poem it means a lot, I loved this poem it told a very sad yet brilliantly told storey, easily gets a 5 im suprised more people havnt voted commented on this

I didn't understand this. But it's not your fault. I just had an immense concentration on the picture you were painting; vivid. I noted your use of words, not the story line. It was written with superb grace. The imagery at the start made me smile, and by the end, I had a frown. You need not to of understood this to know how brilliant this is.

And if you don't get my ramblings; I am just merely stating that this piece is very well written.

awesome poem. i love it 5

hmm i liked the way the whole thing came together an dall the elements were woven into eachother and the flow of emotion was extremely beautiful..kudos
p.s plzz read some of my stuff

Brilliant! So imaginative and capturing. So different to most poems, I loved it
5/5

This is unlike any poem i have ever read. Well Done!! keep up the work. 5/5 from me.
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I don't know what it is about this poem, but it's magical. I mean, not happy-magical but yeah.

Sorry, I'm not good at explaining, so I'll just say this is a good poem. ;)

I like it but i did find it a little confusing(You could probably put that down to me being blonde,lol) but it was good. There was a spelling error though that you might want to fix 'lyes' is 'lies'

Then also there's something bout your very first verse that feels out of place, not specifically the words but more the style because everyother verse has 4 lines and that has 5, so you might wanna work on that a little bit.

hey.....it was a really good poem...you have a talent ......it kind of confused me but i just get confused a lot lol...5/5!

class poem!!! i reallly enjoyed reading it!!! great poem!!! x)

hey, pretty good. keep it up. 5/5

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You can feel your emotion coming from the poem. It is very unike. I have never seen a poem quite like this one. Good job 5/5

Its such a cute poem! I really like it, you usued good words and it painted a picture in my head. Its so cute! You did a great job definatly for this being your first time with this style, you should try some more!