by tiffany Mar 24, 2005
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
You shattered my heart |
by Megadrive
I liked it I thought it was beautiful! Hmm... Some advise... I suggest more commas and periods lol. They will give your poem a rhythm, make words more powerful, and get the reader more into it. And periods just help tell the reader when a sentence is over. And of course just make the poem look nicer to=D other then that great job! |
It's good and if it's how you feel it's even better because it's emotonal and moving! I liked it because i'm going through a similar thing now and as for the last verse i only have one thing to say, "YoU gO gIrL" lol but it's true that what goes around comes around and he got what he deserved. Anyways keep it up:) |