I care I might not know you but I care

i dont think u could become a better poet coz that poem just showed me, ur like the best poet already, ur poems are trurely wonderful, keep writing, dont waste ur talent!!!

Luv Always
#~*LuCy*~#

Not too bad. Provide a sense of flow for the reader. Some lines need a little bit of revisement, but besides that you did a good job. Read some of my stuff if you ever get a chance.