very good but also sad
please comment on mine thanks lilkit

very good... 5/5! keep it up

To tell the truth I wasn't expecting much, but then I as I read my excitement grew. I was just waiting for you to write something stupid, but it never came. I loved the way you put this together.

Everyday his heart breaks a little more,
as she wanders through his life.
His heart is trapped like a prisoner of war,
as she sharpens the butcher knife

wow my favourite past of the poem although all of it was really well written.

keep writing u have alot of talent !

take care

That was one of my favourite poems that you have written......it was so good!