I had to delete the others, these were comments from before I deleted on the same poem:

Ashley ( C ) at 2005-03-28

Wow.. Amazing..So good!! Keep writing.. 5/5

sweetenigma ( F C ) at 2005-03-28

yeah no doubt about it...thats hot!!

Writers Block ( F C ) at 2005-03-28

I thought both were great! 5/5 Sounds like an awesome time! Mix your story with mine and we would have a blast! LOL

XOXOXO
Writers Block!

Great poem really nicely written hey since your so good check out mine and see what im doing wrong

very good. reminds me of some of my own times with my girl

It's hard to twine romance and (extremely) strong sexuality together, but methinks you managed quite excellently. My compliments, Kaitlin.

It's hard to twine romance and (extremely) strong sexuality together, but methinks you managed quite excellently. My compliments, Kaitlin.

Wow again.....I don't know what to say. So much passion in this and yet so sensual at the same time. For example, love the lines:

"I close my eyes and feel your fullness,
Filling my void."

Seeing the double meaning of those two lines. One being the sexuality of it and the other being the void filled with love. Make more like this one.

Take Care,

Jesse

N i also liked part 2