Nice.. but.. I feel there needs more. Don't get me wrong.. short poems are nice but this one sounds incomplete.

i like it and i like your rhyme scheme it keeps people interested for longer and makes them wanting more mayb thats why it seems unfinished to some people but i think ur poems are all fab so keep it up! xxx

Nice job:)

I think the last stanza really wrapped it all up. Thanks for using my advice it makes me feel smart :P
Good work.