beautiful poem!! keep up the great work. *5*
Ariane
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I thought that this was good until the last stanza, Blank poety is good as blank poetry, and rhyming poety is good as rhyming poetry, but the two don't mix. So many times I read brilliant blank poetry, and then the last stanza rhymes, which just throws off the entire mood, try to be consistant. Keep writing!

well leah, we didnt rhyme on purpose, but thanx for the comment anyway