You told me to check you out, and so I did, and I am sorry to say that I don't like this poem at all. The rhymes seem extremely forced, and the theme is not actually original, not that it must be, but still...

I like it....but I do have to agree a little with Enslavement. It does seem a little forced. Also, the use of the "&" sign disturbs me as well as the confusion with your/you're...
But, it still a pretty good. Just try not to be so forced and thanks for the comment.
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a poem can never be wrong, your are doing great, just be real with your feelings and dont think too hard about what you are writing. just let it flow..

Awww this is beautiful. the first thing i picked up on was the childlike rhyme like love and dove, that is overused in the poetry world but u used it nicely, was refreshing because it backed up the whole idea of the poem, its LOVE and sometimes love it childish and immauture and naive. Its wonderful =]
For another poem that isnt about love, if u want to write something on a topic which isnt as childlike as love or infatuation, then my suggestion is to use more mature words, maybe with more than one sylable?
just a suggestion!!
Geo
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