Holding On...

by David   Mar 31, 2005


Dreams of holding you and your every touch,
Silence...theres no words.. I just love you so much,
Thoughts of hope, Dreams of happiness,
Everything we've always wanted can happen for us,
Seemingly thinking of every breathe you take,
The never-ending love I have keep me wake,
The Lonely nights that I sat and prayed,
That someone as perfect as you would come my way,
Then I woke from my sleep,
To find you.. the one I keep,
To hold and treasure for all my life,
Seemingly waiting for the day you'll be my wife.

Sorry this ones not really good I wrote it when i was really sad and i really couldn't think about the wording i just had to let out some of my feelings...please leave your commits

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  • 19 years ago

    by ♥Munchkin♥

    I agree with Tessie!.. How was that in any way shape or form a bad poem... I loved it. You seem like such an amazing guy. I hope you never change. xxx love always xxx

  • 19 years ago

    by EMILIE

    thats cute !and wonderful you feel thats way about someone special to u!! 5 excellent!!!

  • 19 years ago

    by Joy

    Amazing piece!! This IS good!! Thanks for your comment on my poem...I'm sorry to hear what you're going through. Stay strong. If you ever need me don't hesitate to drop an E-mail!! Good luck!!

    .:jOy:.

  • 19 years ago

    by Timothy

    exquisite, despite your evident self-doubt. Highly enjoyable to find a poet as expressive as yorself, with which I can see similarities beyond verbs and words strung together in managable sentences. I think use of the word "seemingly" is the only thing that kind of looks repetitive, and only to a small point. looks like it was written in a stream of consciousness, a flow of freely written emotions, which I consider some of my personal best pieces of work, so I consider this a depictive and beautiful piece, as long as she who needs to see it actually sees and understands it. great job once again.

  • 19 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    beautiful =) really well written. Not as good as your other, but it is still amazing!! <3 so lovely and touching...You're an incredible writer from what I can see and I hope you don't stop writing <3 xxxx

    -Mortalidaga
    xxTakeCarexx

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