Comments : This isn't fair!!!

  • 19 years ago

    by Beautiful x Disaster

    Hey! Not bad. But don't over rhyme with the same ending.. (i.e. rare,wear,dare, stare)..maybe rhyme it once..because what you're doing now is trying to hard to make it rhyme that it doesnt make sense.. and its gets overused..
    just some advice ;-)

    -Christine