I liked this. If this was only one of your firsts, I can't wait to see what else you write! keep in touch, tell me when you write some more, I would love to read them!

That was a beautiful poem! Very well done I hope u will continue to post! If u want take a look at mine! Thanx and Take Care! 5/5 Brooke

This is realy good would like to see more.

thanks everyone!

Wow this is really beautiful xox

Wooo rok on! i liked it :)

Wow!!! this is an amazing poem. Your very talented. I love this poem alot. I'm really speachless though but you did an amazing job keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever

Another good poem. i enjoy reading your work, you really need to post more poems on here

So sad. So good. Awesome, keep up the good work. Write more!!!!

Wow i love it it is so great an anwesome

You have a lot of tallent I am impressed awesome poem

Awesome poem..keep posting i love the two poems you got..

Pretty damn good to be one of your firsts. I love it! It shows no fear of dying and being in heaven...something you shouldn't fear. Very nicely done!!!!

This is excellent for one of your firsts! its better than my newest ones lmao! I loved the discribtive imagery. the flow was great! well done xxx

Awwww...cute

This was a pretty solid piece,.. no parts straying from the point of the poem..

they dance and frolic while flapping tattered wings
all of them on notes a song do sing

i imagine dancing and frollocking to be on the fround, and the language implies they're in the air.. its hard to think of them dancing in the air for me, but that might be to my fault..

all of them on notes a song do sing

this seems to imply that they dance to the songs, but in a unusual way... maybe change that so its more fluent and understandable.. i like the conclusion to this piece.. the part about not falling,.. ties in well with the angels holding you up.. quite nice imagery.. keep writin.. pZ out

Very different poem from the ones i've read in this site... keep it up ! 5/5 : )

I loved the poem! It was awesome and inspirational!