Beautiful.

Puzzled slightly; is the person you are refering to in the first line, one in the same with the person to whom you are refering in the last?

If so, why did you change the reference from "Your" to "Her"?

Kalika

Wondering why you say your then her....

The words were good, though, and I like how some of it seemed to be things you don't really hear to much about like the words. It's different but that one line you might want to take a look at unles you were thinking about the your in your mind to yorself in which case I think it would be her.

The silibant sounds of 'place' 'erase' 'face' etc. all work really well here and I love the dialect that you sometime use in your poetry gives it more of a personal feel. Seemed more like a love poem to me....but still very well scribed..

[lostlaureate - come find me]

I liked it, Origonal subject matter.. good work!