Comments : Don't...

  • 19 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    The repetition of refrains within the stanzas brings out a manic mesmerism to the piece that emphasizes the trapped feeling. Quite nicely done!

    At first I didn't like the "how?" at the end standing alone. But rereading it a third time, I've decided I do like it. Gives a glimmer of hope because that cycle of repetition is broken, if even for a moment. Does that make sense?