Unfinished

by TrUtH hUrTs   Apr 3, 2005



city lights twinkle slowly
the neon wilderness speaks only
in empty words which have no meaning
and all i get is this empty feeling

as lonely as the desert wind
i see the world but am never to be seen

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  • 17 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Short but very interesting and it means a lot 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Nici

    It's good to see that you can create short poems that have the same levels of description and feeling to them as your longer pieces.

    Keep writing
    Nici

  • 19 years ago

    by Johnny Marlin 2

    Another wonderful write. Although I don't agree with most comments. I think you should leave it exactly the way it is. Very powerful, short poem.

  • 19 years ago

    by ShadowedPhoenix

    Great piece but i agree you should lengthen it because it was amazing with these few words that i think it will be one of the best with a bit more! 5*

  • 19 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    You're off to a very good start, I would whole-heartedly suggest you attempt to finish this one.

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