I love short poems with a lot of expression of feelings in them this is a great poem in my opinion

Very well done for as small as it was seek a writer in here named Meena and let her look at some of your work. You have a good start with her thought she may be able to help you alot. I have alot of work in here but I think you would do well talking to her. if you would like to see some of my work look under Never-Ending Gift take care and keep writing

nice poem. short but has feelings..keep it up!! :)

if this is actually unfinished i'd love to read it more.. either way its very well written and i think your on to something brilliant

this poem is definitely on the right track....very, very nice. Even withint the few words that are here, I get a very cold, empty feeling. Good job.

I can't picture it so well. You're standing in the middle of the city and you're so alone. Beautiful poem, loved it.
Satuxxa

You're off to a very good start, I would whole-heartedly suggest you attempt to finish this one.

Great piece but i agree you should lengthen it because it was amazing with these few words that i think it will be one of the best with a bit more! 5*

Another wonderful write. Although I don't agree with most comments. I think you should leave it exactly the way it is. Very powerful, short poem.

It's good to see that you can create short poems that have the same levels of description and feeling to them as your longer pieces.

Keep writing
Nici

Short but very interesting and it means a lot 5/5