Nicely written, it has a good flow to it. 5.

~rolo

Hayley: This piece is truly wonderful even though it covers such a sad topic.

Babe I know that you have experienced so much pain in your life and you have done a great job reflecting your pains in your writings.

As I have always said you continue to show great talent. I only pray that you continue with the gift that God gave you and use it to help others that have suffered as well..

Good Job!

--Sher

i hope u arnt doing what you imply as this would be a great waste of such beautiful talent. You are young and i can understand how hard life maybe for you..but if you keep going and get through this you will be rewarded and be a stronger person. lifes precious and so are you. So look ahead and not behind you have a future you just have to believe in it.

take care !

the rhyming was good, but it didn't flow to great. it seemed as though some of them were forced. this sentance- but what ever you do don't forget I'm sorry,- kinda confused me. i think you should change it. well, i gave it a 4/5, it was good, but could be improved

sooo good! 5/5 for this one.. keep it up.. hugs

sad but well written...a moving piece... liked it... i can relate...

5/5 hope u pass by mine... votes and comments much appreciated...
much love
***letishia***

Life will get better.. It just takes time.. I can relate to this poem alot it hit home... Keep writing and keep your head up.. take care (always)) xx:

*> : PainOfOne