Hey i dont think you have to fix it at all, this is how you feel inside and the way you express it is incredible and unique!!
5 out of 5 defintly
xoxo bam, . . . thank you for rreadn mi poem!

this is good, i am totaly in love with all ur poems they r so good! i think this once would be totally amazing if u kept the same idea, but made it rhyme. u no wot i mean? its sucha great idea and the repitition is brill, try rhyming it and let me no how it goes coz id love to see the finished result :) ur definatley added to me favs. love it xxxxxxx

Thanks Goergie, Yeah I'll try out the Rhyming thing! XOX
Robyn