hey there...i really liked this poem but think it would benefit from being one or two stanzas longer as i was just gettin into it and really wanted to know what happened etc...really great poem. thanks for ur comment!
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xxxLoUxxx

Yeah this was a very great poem! Thanks for commenting on mine! I really appreciate it!! ^_^ Your poem was really well written! Yeah as Lil Luce said, I was getting into it and wanted to know what happened! But it was cut off *cries* HAHA Oh well! WONDERFUL!
^_^ V ~Kady~

Maybe add something because it doesn't seem to be quite finished. Still it was great.