Shelby that was very well done the rhyming was great! 4 lines to each stanza was good as well! I don't think I would change anything about this poem! Amazing job the poem. It was unique as well I like that! If u have any questions on how the site works just let me know and I will try and help u out! Would u read my 2 newest ones "Walk on the beach" and "Hell" I would like to get ur opinion on them! Thanx and Take Care! Brooke 5/5

hey, the rhyming was really good.
I enjoyed reading this poem.
thanks for your lovely comments.
much love,
marjan