Deep Peace

by Polly   Apr 5, 2005


When I'm lost I just slip away from all arms.
Away from all pain, and away from all harm.

My mind is elsewhere, but I'm still standing here.
But nothing else matters, because no harm will touch near.

I imagine a world, all alone, just mine.
Simple, simple peace, heavenly divine.

Imagine the one thing to make me in peace,
All fears and worries, destroy them to cease.

I remember there is hope, there's an angel standing near:
To banish all the pain, the scared and the fear.

I just forget who I am, forget why I'm in pain,
Forget what they say, I have no worries again.

The pain is just madness, no real place in my head.
Replace it with, joy and happiness instead.

The world all comes back, I'm standing right here.
I'm calmer and more prepared; forgotton is my fear.

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  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    I'm calmer and more prepared, not never ending fear.
    [Sound of cars crashing and a sonic boom. Good f**king god, DOUBLE NEGATIVE -cringes- that RUINED IT]

    This was really strong and really good up until that d*mned line. I'm apt to downrate you just for it. People don't know grammar anymore and it sickens me. But I won't; I'll look at the rest of the poem [I'll give you a 5] for it was beautifully written.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 18 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    I loved the imagery of this, the idea of being able to drift off somewhere. I guess it's like daydreaming crossed with meditation lol.
    A nice simple write.

  • 18 years ago

    by LockedInEternity

    This was a good poem, but the flow just didn't get to me...oh well, maybe it's just me..:P...I also caught something that didn't sound quite right.
    "My mind is elsewhere, but I'm still standing here.
    But nothing else matters, because no harm will touch near."
    the "touch near" part just sounded off...maybe you could replace it with something like "come"..but hey, its just a suggestion =D Great poem! Keep it up!!

  • 18 years ago

    by aimee

    Wow i really like this poem t's really abstract and it's one of those that only the writer would realy know what it was about it flowed really well. nice work

    xox
    love stained sheetz

  • 18 years ago

    by Daranged_psycopath...wholovescheer

    O i like they way you made this poem rhym it rox

    diva

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