Cry

I didn't mind this poem but I found it a bit boring after the first few lines, there was bits of forced rhyming in it, I think that if you work on it it could be better :D

sorry, but im honest x)

thanx phoenix :) ill keep that in mind, id luv 2 able 2 write sumthin longer bt at the minute im just nt ther yet, hav onli reli started writin poems about a month ago, thanx 4 all ur comments and also to sarah jane and kim hu took the time 2 comment on pretty much everythin. thanx xxx

Hey remember never let anyone put you down and feel worthless, sometimes people forget others also have feelings, never be discouraged or stop writing if it's something you wanna do....With that said

I liked this poem and it was full of emotion however there are little things that need work but nothing Drastic! You could try improving the flow and once again increasing you length because in reality it will intensify your pain... If you ever need any help with life or poetry PM and i'll be glad to help!

very sad, and I guess the poem made me feel hopeless. Though it was well written, try writing some cheerful poems too! Keep writing,
Satuxxa

Another great piece, another 5/5 Keep em comin, and stay strong
xo