i really liked it, it was very good, keep it up, great job.
-Kit

I liked it, infact I liked it alot! It had some really strong feelings in it, you really have talent! Keep it up xxx

another amazing poem! you have a talent!

great poem i really like it 5/5

Your poems are amazing and seem to flow so amazingly well:)

One suggestion though with this verse
*Clenched fists, knashing teeth,
just kick me down again1,
soon i can't help but crush your body,
to the point it will never mend2,*

I think you shoul make 1 and 2 rythme not because it has to but your poem flows that rythme scheme and with it not rythming it really breaks up the flow.

Your poems are amazing and seem to flow so amazingly well:)

One suggestion though with this verse
*Clenched fists, knashing teeth,
just kick me down again1,
soon i can't help but crush your body,
to the point it will never mend2,*

I think you should make 1 and 2 rythme not because it has to but your poem flows that rythme scheme and with it not rythming it really breaks up the flow.

Lol sorry i got clicker happy:)

Holy crap that was amazing i love it! Keep up the AWESOME work! You have a true gift, you can go some where with that and make a statement! Try your best and you will succeed!
**~Kaori~**

It does seem to be all over the place, but honestly, it just adds to the emotion of the piece. Well done.

wow... this was so amazing!!! i can only wonder who or what made you this angry... you have true talent!! Tom

breathtaking! fantastic! keep it up! 5/5!

i really like it. again. i am gonna add you to my favorites. keep up the good work!!
crystal

it doesnt need to flow to be good. thanks for the comment.. its been a while since i have written but i still like to read. keep up the good work.

Great , i really liked it alot
~haZE