i enjoyed this.it seemed to me to flow really fast (not sure if thats how i was reading it) but it really built up an energy through your words. i liked the repatition on the first stanza i thought that waas good. i thought the forth stanza struggled to flow however but i thought the poem got better and better towards the end. i really enjoyed it! thanks for ur kind words as ever
take care always!

xxxLoUxxx

I really liked that i thought it was really diff to ur usual style and there were lots of new ideas and things in that but i loved it. i thought that you did that really well some times when people write out of their usual style the stuff isnt as good but i thought this really was. Hun im always here 4 ya, i hope your okay, im kinda worried bout ya, your poems and then seeing you its like you got a mask on, have you? ill speak to ya soon squeaky,
luv frm elz
xoxox

FANTASTIC! i love the style!!! You've gotta write more poems in this style, it was absolutely fantastic! It could be made into song lyrics it was so so good. I want you to know i'm still here for you if you ever need me, your a star * xxxxxx