hey great poem, enjoyed reading this one.

Although you can space out and make it in verses, apart from that its a really good write. nice rhyming, good flow, i like it. take care

I thought the poem was very good. The only thing I think would make it better would be to break it up a little to make it easier to read. I have had trouble with that myself. Other than that I thought it was very well written. Take Care! Brooke 5/5

very nice poem good flow with the words i liked it a lot

Great poem. It was well written but the structure makes it a lot more difficult to understand. But no problem it can always be fix. Still great job!!! 5/5 =)

Can u plz comment on my new poem tilted My Story part II thanks!!!=)

Great poem!! The only thing wrong with it is you might think about seperating some of the verses to make it easier to understand!! Other then that i thought you did a terrific job!!! 5/5

Great poem, another difficult one to decipher, but I understood it well anyhow. You are an excellent writer, and have good abilities in captivating all readers towards your work. Keep up the great work! 5/5

Wow.. very intense, very good, very powerful, very deep! keep it up! 5/5

Great peice, the descriptions are fantastic and really strenghen the overall peice.

I liked that poem, and i like alot of your poems, you have a way of capturing me from the beginning, wanting me to carry on.
well done
x

I love it.. its so cynical and bitter (or is it just me?? :P) it sheds light on so many unkowns or just things ignored.. i loved the rhyme, tho at places they werent complete, but ur sharp words made up for it.. it was honest and serious.. even tho it seems kinda conversational, which doesnt reli appeal to me at some points in a poem, it's good.. it contributes to the overall picture and idea of the poem..

i just love it.. its truthful and thats all i care about in a poem (that and others :P) hehe, but i meant that i dont care if its harsh, as long as its the truth..

keep going
ur gr8
take care
NannO

p.s. thnx a lot for ur comment, it reli meant a lot to me