I'm beginning to test out free verse poetry, so feel free to critique and tell me if I should be doing something different.

i think your poetry is maturing, and that if you were to compare your more recent poems to your earlier ones, you'd find that there has most certainly been a change, and I think it has been for the better

That last verse was awesome!

Aken Sol

wonderfully written poem! i really like this...and of course it deserves 5.