Brilliant poem..
I honestly like it a lot..
;)

I like this - it's a simplistic format but a complex web of pure feeling and what felt like raw emotion xx excellent I am impressed

awsome poem

Has anyone told you you're brilliant?

Wow, that's so well written, I truely love it!!! It's beautiful....

Really nice poem I liked it a lot had emotion really cool

well i liked it alot, you used some really good words and i thought it had a good meaning, but i found it hard to follow and to me it didnt really flow i mean its good but for me its missing something
sorry......
>>4/5<<
bec

um, it was a little confusing, so i dont really know what to say -.-U

Normally I'm not hostile, and I guess I did ask for honest comments...But you don't have to say something if you don't have anything to say.

i think it was good but it would flow better in stanzas of the same amount or shorter amounts....but it still had a lot of emotion and i enjoyed it

Excellent poem! 5 <3

excellant..............you have an amazing way wiyh all your word, you are now in my favorites.............love ya becky

Excellent poem! 5 keep it up! I can relate to this poem! <3

I must admit it was a little bit hard to the first time, I read it twice and took my time the second time and it made much more sense, the beautiful use of symbolism and methaphor, really makes it a little harder to follow but does show your skills with that certain aspect of writting. All in all, a good read, intriguing and interesting to read the first and second time i did so, and i did like it's flow
Good job! 5/5

I really love your poetry... each phrase evokes images suffused with such depth its impressive.. i wish i could be of more help and actually critique this, but its not an easy poem to work with.. this is a very abstract poem with a lot of imagery/metaphor to convey a strong, helpless, kind of message..

I tried to be somebody
One day.
But as they say,
I crashed and burned.
Somebody, my best
Was nobody to you.
I tried

i cant stress how much i enjoy the alterating stanza,.. thats really a good idea and for this piece, the changes within each individual stanza(though few)were a great accentuation..

id have to say my favorite stanza is my third.. other than that.. i dont got much for you, unfortunately,.. but what i said is true.. good job + pZ out

I saw this poem as something like a song. It was so beautifully written, and the repeating verses kept it up to date. Though I do see this as something more along the lines of a sad poem and not a love poem.