a true expression of desire ..has the lady in black read this? great poem

This must be one special lady! Another exellent poem! Take Care! Brooke

i wish i could give you more than 5! that was great, almost a little erotic. ;)

cool

I want you just after I read this Im sure the girl you wrote this about would love to read this...Good job...
Xox Sherrie

very, very amazing. this is definitely a 5/5. If I could, I would rate it a 100/5.

omg i loved it!!!ur soo goood.....i wish i actually knew u..lol...man i wish i someone wrote me poems like that...*5/5*def.!!!
~*~yasmin~*~

meh, you can do better. 4/5 the end "i want you" just doesnt seem to fit properly its missing..something.
~Freak~

another good one...although the ending could be tweaked a lil bit...but that's just me...otherwise good word choice, you have such brilliant ways of comparing two things! nice job! 5/5

I really like this...My boyfriend lives in Arizona so, I can relate, even if that is not what you meant. You wrote this in a way so that many can relate!