by Justin Groft Apr 13, 2005
category :
Friendship, family /
love, friendship
We sat behind a window that peered into the world, |
by No Motiv?
"The bicyclist with the gender confused frame"...what a great line (it made me smile)! |
by Kris Lynn
Wow.... |
by Justin Groft
Thanks so much for that one. It is way more hidden then what i wanted it originally, but i could never figure out exactly what to do to fix that. I guess the story is, and maybe this will clear up the ending, i was literally sitting in a coffee shop at about 530; sunrise. I was sitting in the "theatre" seats out on a side street, just spying all these things as they walked by. I was there talking to someone who i had found myself in a very bad relationship, which started from a very simple kiss. I was telling her everything i needed to say, and it was going horribly. Someone you really cared about, you know? Just never in that way, etc, etc,etc,. The last line is about literally falling, in love, into depression, whichever, just the idea, that all these things i was witnessing were swallowing me, and i was taking it all in, and just being completely swamped. |
super original piece. fascinating perspective here...the first time i read it i found it a sort of odd place to end...but i read it again, and it makes more sense. |
by LAST RONIN
A little confusing and hard to fallow, I read it a few time, I think if you add a little flow it will be a very good poem. |