Blossoming Love

by Dorotea©   Apr 13, 2005


I remember, she was pale and fragile
But her feet, her feet were agile
Afraid of life, she cowered in fear or
She ran, ran to hide and disappear
Her life, yes it had been hard
That left, left her heart scarred
But her mind, it was very strong and
She knew, knew her past was wrong
One more, this was the last chance
She’d give, give herself this chance
Some hope, deep within her soul
Flickered, flickered like glowing coal

I remember, he was tall yet lonely
He felt, felt like he was the only
Dreary days, rain fell in his heart and
He wished, wished to share a part
His life, yes it had been dull
No wings, a life so far from full
Yet with hope, yes he continued and
Hoped for, for a helping hand
Somehow, his life would still change
Yes he knew, knew it would change
A spark, hope had light it’s light
Now less, less dark was his night

They met, first time under the stars
Their love, their love wiped away all scars
At first sight, joy came to both and
Their hearts, hearts began their growth
She has, yes she’s forgotten fear
He knows, knows only that she’s near
Their love, like a blossoming rose
It lasts, lasts and forever grows

©Sonja von Bell

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  • 19 years ago

    by Jason Meres

    Intruiging rhyme scheme, never witnessed one quite like it. Solid content and rhythm, very minor flow issues....well done.

  • 19 years ago

    by cac123

    Soooo lovely and beautiful. Again so amazing i would only change this part

    "But her feet, her feet were agile"
    to
    But she was quick, her feet were agile"
    or something like that feet twice is a little akward.
    5/5

  • 19 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    it really flowed

  • 19 years ago

    by Sarah-Louise

    I really like the way you've used repettition in this piece, but I have one point that may lead to an improvement. Taking note of the rhyming at the end of the lines, lines 9 and 10 uses 'chance' at the end of both. Personally, I think this lowers the quality of the poem. If one of the 'chances' was changed, then I think it would make it more effective. Apart from that...great poem! Keep it up! Take care Sarah-Lou x x x

  • 19 years ago

    by Exquisite_Emily

    I love the rythem of this poem! 5/5, and keep up the good work!