David this makes you seem psychotic.I don't think I should sit next to you in the library anymore.Lol |
by Andrea
yes it worked! awesome write! |
yee it worked. good one though... keep it up man |
by hussain
great job. love the rhyming scheme. it was classed under dark poetry and thats what it portrayed.glad you aint psychotic though |
by Brookeღ
Makes you sound a little crazy but I reallt don't think you are! I have to say that was very good! Brooke |
by Rozzy
wicked poem it got chills running up spine. |
by Lost Girl
So evil, you are a great writer, really had me hooked! Keep it up! |
by derp
its cool |
by -LydaRose-
Yes, it worked, but may I suggest something? Your last word, furry, I think you should change it to 'fury'. :) |
by Jasmin
wow it really did work good job! |
by Hina
Excellent use of Imagery. I felt like i was constructing the murder... I loved it! One of the best murder poetry on the web |
by Ari
Yes. It worked very well. |
Interesting and thanks for the note at the bottom i now feel so much better commenting:) I liked it even though dark poetry is not really my scene....I agree bout adding a little bit of flow as that will really having people captivated and afraid! |
by Robiie
great poem, very evilish...worked great ! |
by ASPHYXIATED
yes i worked!!!!! cool poem some poems let yea wander but this kept me glued to the screen.....5 x) |
by Meagan
good job yeah you got ur evil poem down pat lol |
by Areyoucrazy
Yes it worked !!! |
by Bredada
yea it worked it sounds really evil ive had those feelings were i just want to go crazy on someone n kill but i hold back im not ccrazy just really short tempered |
Indeed it did work...very well I would say. You've got quite a talent for sounding like a malicious, wicked, killer...I wouldn't have thought you were actually psychotic...but you entered the mind of a killer well... |