Very strong emotions in this one, I liked the way you showed your anger in describing something psychical, very good indeed, keep it up xxx

That has to be one of the best poems i've ver read, I'm speechless and i have no clue what else to say because there are no words that can explain how amazing this is.

grrrr...LOL I really enjoy your stlye your a great writer I could feel your pain...
Xox Sherrie

"No one knows of the weight i carry,"
The "of" seems to block the flow a bit. Other than that, very nicely done. The emotion seeps through.

hey its reli gud well dun

Really good use of poetic devices, and excellent empathy... or perhaps, it's semi-boigraphical? I've been there and know how it feels, and this poem sums it all up...

Full of very strong emotion! You could feel the anger as you read the poem. The words you used were perfect to get your point across! Very well done! Take Care~! Brooke 5/5

very well written, you know as everyone as stated you could feel the anger in every word. I do think you have the ability to express yourself with words on paper, just be sure you can express yourself out loud....You don't have to take anyones crap, you are far better than that.....Great writer Love your work. Thanks for sharing....Love ya Becky

hey, i just wanted to say thank u so much for taking the time to read and give advise to a few of my poems. i really appreciate it :)

Your work is inspiring to me, in a way ... keep it up :)

it was real good but scary in a good way that u can show ur emotions like that

Hey such strong emotions! well done with this poem. 10 out of 10 for this! I felt the anger and also the sadness in the poem but ur a brilliant writer. Keep it up! :)

"they assume their right" Their should be they're

You shouldn't use short hand words like "cuz" as that can deter people from reading your poems. Some figure (including me) that if you don't take it seriously they shouldn't either.

Ok that's out of the way....minor details..;) I really liked this....very powerful and it flowed so nicely. Hope all is well....take care...

another great poem. you could feel the anger in this one. amazing job.
crystal

Liked the idea,.. good imagery,.. fighting someone to no avail,.. and i assume you dont truly mean fighting,.. just resisting i guess u could say.. i have no problems with this piece besides a few spelling corrections; the minor things.. good job, the whole time the flow was good but at times id notice something you did that made it that much better.. the 6th stanza is an example of such.. pZ out..