My friend, there is no cure, but there's no better poison to pick than writing. If you're a good (or rather, truly talented) writer, people will recognize you as such but they seem to hold it against you. If you have more meaning to your poetry than they're able to comprehend, they make stupid comments like "the flow is wrong" or such, when we all know the flow is not wrong, that's how it's supposed to read.

Or maybe they're just that stupid.

lol

Sorry, bringing my own personal pet peeves into the critiquing of your poem.

Here's how I critique. (And you can tell I have a lot to say...so you may want to get a snack before you read any further, lol)

First, I generally skim over a poem, catching the rhythm. I don't bother with meter, generally, because not all poetry has to follow meter to have a good rhythm.

Second, I fix my attention to the rhyme scheme, if there is any. That doesn't really apply here.

Third, I reread the poem and go for the intellectual content. If I catch something here I'm almost always ready to give the poem a 5 because so many STUPID people on this site write about crap or cliched subjects. The only reason a poem is bad if it has an intellectual content is if there's really bad tense, spelling, or grammar. Or if the "intellectual content", as I say, is just stupid.

On all of these different levels, I'd give you a five.

(I also critique the "magical-ness" of a poem, but that doesn't apply here, either.)

I'd give you a 26 or something but they don't allow you to vote over five....lol

I love the principal behind this - well done a good piece of work xx

Another unique piece! Good job keep posting and I'll keep reading! Take Care! Brooke

Great poem; i like the meaning behind it; a lot of people long for that perfect place, but its quiet funny that we are the once who made it like that at the start
great piece 5/5