Not your best one but I have to admit that I'm intrigued by your work. I admire your faith in the world xx

lol, Thanks. The "For those with silver, those with gold" line is meant to like 2nd and 1st places here...If you're the best or if you're not quite...(Or switch that around, lol)

I know in a lot of spots people think there are too many words, but when it's read (by me, of course) it really flows. Like you pointed out the first line in the 3rd stanza. When I read it, the lines after match up because of emphasis I put on the words...

I suppose posting my poetry on the internet doesn't really do it justice in the rhythm department...lol...But thanks so much for the suggestions. :)

It is refresing to read a poem with so much faith hope and love in it keep smiling and keep writing 5+

lol, thanks...:)

I wish everybody on this site, or any of the others...Heck, I wish everybody anywhere was as aimable as you.

Thanks for the attention. ;)

You know, it is incomprehensible to me how you can ever get anything much lower than a 4.5, I am taken aback by the talent you possess.

Absolutely beautiful and i just LOVE the message behind it....very nice flow and you don't AlWaYs have to listen to what others say as long as your happy and if you feel it flows well then it does because poetry is a personal thing.... At the end of the day it's YOUR and YoUrS alone.....(This is aimed at killer not tEyS, in case some one says that or thinks it,lol)

once again, it was good until this end, for instance this part, "I'll always be here for you.
My friendship, my love - always true.
My faith in you cannot be moved." the wording doesn't seem right. try something more like,
"smile i'll always be here, making sure you do, not only that, i'll be here for you. you're my friend, i'll love you so, and my faith in you will never go" i dunno..its ur own style. i just think it would sound a little better.

It wasn't about a friend.

I really liked this poem. Generally, I dislike poetry that has more than 3 rhymes in a row that are the same, but this was written well, and flowed nicely. Good job!

Beautiful! Flowed with perfection! Good work keep it up! Take Care! Brooke~

this was beautiful!!! it flowed really well and was a great happy read :D

Goood poem!

WOW! How refreshing to read such a beautiful , uplifting , positive poem. I think you did a wonderful job on this, I wouldn't change a thing.
Keep smiling!!!
Take care & God bless you!

Wow....I love this. A beautiful poem. It's nice to read such an encouraging and love filled poem....This poem proves you care and surely proves your love...some things people can't say with a 1000 words. Excellent write! 5/5

It seems so often people put commas and periods at the end of every line in their poems...(I think) it takes away from the flow. A comma insinuates a pause and that distracts from what you're saying....MY OPINION. Do as you will, you're the writer.

Again....lovely poem!! :)

i really like this poem. its really...happy lol!

I loved this poem. It seriously made me smile. There are no major flaws in this poem. The rhyming is awesome and it flowed beautifully. xX

I really like the central concept behind this poem, so many people are quick to sorrow for all the little things that go bad, but they forget to smile for the million of things they deserve to be happy for, or even that one big thing that is worth a smile. The only thing that didn't seem to flow with the rest of the poem was the ending lines, this is just my personal opinion, take it or leave it. But besides that another great write. You are truly blessed with the gift for writting

that was a very nice poem! i loved the way it flowed it was very good! keep it up! and take care. :)

Light poem with a comforting message.. i really like it in contrast with a lot of depressive poems featured on here,..

As it is for the young, and for the old.

i dont know the grammatical correctness, but my mind wants to change it to: as it is for the young, so is it for the old,..
this of course would interrupt the flow, but it just seems like that'd fit better.. i dunn0.. the second line in the second stanza,.. that rhyme seems forced.. other than that, the poem is light and airy; doesnt go too deep and has a simplistic appeal.. good read.. pZ out

Awww...good poem... very inspiring! thanks!!!

hugs,

michelle