I feel and understand what this poem is trying to give out. Maybe because on lines I can relate. Another intresting and deep thought out poem
xox

your work is simular to my own, but still real choppy. And your not focused in on the meaning you want to convey. If you could paint a picture for me with words that would be a step in the right direction.
Read Burn and Turn around and you will see how the poem takes a life of its own ok. Keep it up and never stop. I was where your at now