Yes a poem straight from your heart. It is good! :)

but a bit scary if you get me. 5!

Good, I can see the progression. I like the way you spun the character, deep and very soulful. Keep it up.

This poem kinda scared me! But I like it, it's atleast very unique. Keep writing, take care,
Satuxxa

Hey :-) Saw your message on one of my poems, and trust me, you're great and you don't need help! saw some of your poems and this is my fave! I will comment on more wheni have time! Well done!! Keep writing you're great!

Great poem....It didn't rythme and yet it flowed perfectly and was so moving, Very special and unique.

I think this is a sad but good poem honey. I hope that you find what you need to help make life easier and I hope that you keep writing and using this as a coping mechanism instead. Good work keep it up xx

Interesting...very well written and interesting. Lol.

wow, this gives me a whole new look on things. Its a little scary, but its a great poem! Keep up the great work. xox

this seemed like a bunch of ideas you had that you strung along. It had no begining or end to it and left a bland taste in my mouth Read Unexpected Guest and ominous fate. Both have a tale to tell and you can see where alot of work been put into it. If I were to do it I would breath more life into who your talking about. Make me understand him. Thats when your work will really shine.

nice. Would prefer more imagery, but nice.
~Hina
Ps. Keep tryin, your effort can make you!

nice poem 5/5

its really not bad i like it. i think the only thing yo ushould change is to get rid of the i hate my father part.
~Freak~

You seemed to have scratched the surface on this sibject. But I want more if your gonna write about Vampires or anything for that matter look deeper then the surface. With time and age this will come trust me good attempt...

I Loved This One~! And I Usualy Don't Like Dark Poems But This One Changed My Mind 5/5~! xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

This poem was not only unique but the title immediately grasp my attention. Your emotion lingering within this poem was pure devouration within the readers mind...I LOVED THE POEM...you did an AMAZING job well done!!!
take care always 5/5
P.S. i look forward to reading more of your work

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yeah...good poem again...

Yet I think you should use a somewhat more advanced language in order to make it more interesting...

Some of the rhymes seemed forced, and it flowed awkwardly at some points, but still...I kinda like this one too...There is a strong message in it, I think..

Bet you like vampire movies=)

Keep it up!

I simply cannot see how people could think this is scary or miss the vampiric point, it's brilliantly done....particularly from first person perspective. I'd love to see this character developed further...perhaps a short story.

the last stanza was kinda not great because it was different from the rest of the poem. otherwise, it was great

good! keep it up!