Very promising write hun. Words on paper are the things that keep us going. :D
Nice work girl.

Loving you angel -
;;Kal.

It ended well, no need to change anything. I love the 2nd and 3rd stanza! 5/5

Love you
Heather

Oh i like it, very good! stay strong
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Powerful poem, I like the emotions that come out in this poem, and in all your poems, you are a very talented writer, keep going...

It is so beautiful...it shows that u have the ability to transfer your pain and other emotions into words on paper. I liked how you kept using the word bleeding, it described a lot. 5/5!!!
Hey about that song i wrote, yeah you're exactly right! I actually thought no one would get it so i'm tryin to get the reader's opinion, just to see the results, tryin to make them think. =) This should be fun... Luv Ya So Much ~lil slam~ Thank u for all the comments! Peace Grrl, //ari\\ aka $!l3n+ @++!+ud3