by GoodMorning Apr 19, 2005
category :
Dark, fantasy /
dark, horror
Go ahead and tie me to a chair |
by GoodMorning
most of my poems could use improvement lol....i just dunno how to do it... |
It was a little confusing and i agree with superman about the flow, i liked it and i could feel how angry you were but i still think there's room for improvement especially bout the flow not the confusing part coz i'm blonde:) and i'd probably still be confused if you changed it,lol! |
by GREEN EYES
this is perfect poem but really perfect..... |
by Dorotea©
This poem is better than your other poem because in this one the emotrions are so strong. Very good, I truly enjoyed it. Keep those poems coming, |
by cac123
The flow was kind of choppy and there was a lot of word "clutter" too many syllables. But otherwise its a good pome. heck its a great poem! It wont win you awards, but its a very good start. You can reallly feel your anger in it. It reminds me of my poem "for you i wont condone" it really does. Anyway lots of room for improvement, but you are a better writer then i am!! |