Oh I was loving it until the ending....It was so deep/strong but the ending was a little weak....oh but it still shows you're getting better chicka! --LOVE THE FIRST STANZA! =) 5/5 anyway considering it's your best yet.

Love
Heather

great poem! i love it! really dark and sad. . . but still amazing! keep it up!

Love, Taylor

The flow was kind of choppy and there was a lot of word "clutter" too many syllables. But otherwise its a good pome. heck its a great poem! It wont win you awards, but its a very good start. You can reallly feel your anger in it. It reminds me of my poem "for you i wont condone" it really does. Anyway lots of room for improvement, but you are a better writer then i am!!

This poem is better than your other poem because in this one the emotrions are so strong. Very good, I truly enjoyed it. Keep those poems coming,
Satuxxa

this is perfect poem but really perfect.....

It was a little confusing and i agree with superman about the flow, i liked it and i could feel how angry you were but i still think there's room for improvement especially bout the flow not the confusing part coz i'm blonde:) and i'd probably still be confused if you changed it,lol!

most of my poems could use improvement lol....i just dunno how to do it...