Another strong one honey - well done xx

Fascinating, I love the title. Your originality never ceases to amaze me.

your word choice = excellent
your skills overall = excellent
rythym is choppy, but thats a personal opinion. if i have to muddle through a poem because the rythym is bad, it loses its value in my opinion. most dont see things that way, but im picky about things like that.

dont misunderstand. excellent poem. 5/5 for sure.

It was a very interesting poem, until the end. it seems like you didn't have anything left to say, and no rhymes were comming to mind. just remember, dont start a poem, in one style, and end it with a crappy verson if that style. I can really tell this poem has alot of meaning, its jut wording isn't right. it some parts, you have too many syllables, and some parts, you dont have enough...so it makes the poem seem a little choppy. I do like this poem alot tho.

i love this poem, the flow and rhyme..everything's perfect great job!

I liked this poem for the most part. At the passage that repeated (almost):
May the wind blow lighter
Every day
May you hear happiness in everything
I say
May this moment never
Go away

both times I felt that this felt choppy. Other wise great job. I especially liked the beginning! Keep it up!

I loved this poem, I think you meant it for it to be a little choppy, as your emotions are not always just flowing easy, sometimes they get a little rough ride.....so you made that clear in your words.........terrrific job, 5/5, I will keep reading....you are very talented. Please return the favor. Love ya, Becky

once again it was deadly but shorter stanzas suit me better i still enjoyed reading it xxx

Excellent poem! 5

Beautiful poem. I liked the way you didn't keep the rhyme scheme the same....not sure if that was purposely done or not but it definitely worked! This poem is filled with love and emotion and it can surely be heard through out. I didn’t lose interest at all. Beautifully written! I really enjoyed this! 5/5 :)

That is soooo good! i love the depth of the meaning behind it, i can say that ive felt that way before, and u capture every aspect of it! great job!

Wow, i read a few of your poems and I came to one conclusion...You're a really good writter, allthough most of them almost follow the same kind of rhythm or format they are still very unique each capturing their own mystique of emotion. Very good job on all your poems, i really like how you write, and i look foward to reading more of your poems and i have added you to my favorites.

PS: on another note, thank you for the HONEST comments on my poems, i took your advice and i am in the process of re-working them and fixing them, thank you again for the honest comment, and the pointers.

Alain

wow! that was beautifully written! i loved it! awesome job! keep it up and take care. :)

Aww...how sweet! I loved this...it was just..wow. No words to explain...5/5 definately.

DarkSuicide