Powerful piece Robert - fact or fiction? Just curious. A sad tale told with a simplicity that worked for me anyway. Well done xx

first i want to say your advice on a trip was wonderful and you did help, so thank you...also, i want to let you know this poem is great, wonderful story, great job looking at it from a little boys perspective then chaning to a grown mans...i can tell you did a good job, cause you left me wanting more, but then me needing to use my imagination...

Well, I liked this one better than the other two i've read so far, though I'd say this one does seem to need some work too. Again, the rhyming is forced. If you worked on that I'd say your poems would be totally great, because i really like the idea of your poems and the message behind it is very powerful. Keep writing,
Satuxxa

hey....it was really good! it almost had me in tears....5/5
thanks for commenting on my poems!
-amanda

Wow that was very sad and the truth is that children who grow up in abusive homes become abusive 90% of the time...And thats what makes it so scary and sad, but i liked it but i do agree a little with Satuxxa513 about the rythming scheme.....5*

thats so sad and kinda gory in the beginning... i hope it is not true, and if so, i'm sorry. good poem, though. 5/5

elegent, thought provoking and succinct. Love it!
Hina~

that was sad but well written. good job. 5/5 ~keep it up~

-no more

i really like this poem but i'm not sure bout the ending. what happened? i'm soz, having ANOTHER dense moment.

Sad but so offten true...good job

I see your point mine lacks the detail. The problem I have is when I write I have a problem expressing past experiences that I have put behind me. I wish I could write in such detail but I find my thoughts get shattered and I am all over the place with the poem. If I would have only wrote back then. I am learning a lot with each poem I write and it's people like you that give me the ideas and the help I need to improve! I can't express enough how much I love your work! Brooke