by Robert Apr 20, 2005
category :
Life, society /
inspirational
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Wow.. this poem is truly spectacular.. written with wonderfuul wording.. the structure is much better in this poem and its very insightful and has a lot of depth to it.. great job :D |
by Kaila
The wording was fabulous |
The rhyming was good but sometimes it felt a little forced and it could have flowed better |
I was going to point out a few things, but Nici already did in an earlier comment...if you fix those up and the spelling errors, it'll flow much nicer...the beginning is mostly when I stumbled reading...overall good poem though, once you make a few adjustments it'll be great. It's detailed, and I really like all you have to say. |
by Marjan
I loved the way you wrote this poem. |